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I'm writing this poem as a formality.
As a formal proclamation of escaping -
                    Secondary.
                                      (or at least the tattered perception thereof)

L O V E is completely secondary to foodwaterair
                                      (says the moaning critic)
L O V E, with outstretched wings and unfurled corner pieces,
is completely secondary -
To all the mundane
                               gasps of air that hold forgotten sighs and -
                               pass through our lungs each morningnightday!
To all the routine
                               water drips that fall like tearstorms as -
                               they pound our roof shinglings in!
To all the (dare I say it?) normal
                               chomps of food which take euphoria to -
                               the cleaners and back!
No, L O V E is worth nothing in comparison
                                      (a bell-shined shoe and a pair of hairy buttons, for all they care!)

Primary, oh Primary,
                                      (sitting pretentiously on our countertops,
                                      baring her legs for all to see)
demands that we call her so because we have -
                                                                             no APPRECIATION
                                                                             no ASPIRATIONS
                                                                             no AFFIRMATIONS
defining her necessity.
                                      (not that she is anything very special, a box of Cheerios at best)
She wants homages in the form of russet colored banners waved -
                  every morning, as we munch those leftover mashed potatoes (microwavable)
And a nickel for every time we intake breath! (a bill that was never passed)
                  No, she wants a stamp on every molecule of water
defining it as HERS and HERS alone (as Primary is doing US a favor by giving US what's HERS)

L O V E sits in the corner,
                                        flicking quiet looks at strangled passerby,
                                        following their Primarily choked eyes,
                                        trudging in and out,
And cuddles up with a few lucky,
Plants a kiss on their forehead,
And is called Secondary.
                                      (where's the justice in all that?)

Now, this is only a formality, mind you,
But I am here to confess,
                                      (declare, shout-to-high-heavens) YES!
I am a handmaiden to Secondary!
                                      (played like a string violin into the hands of a faux-god,
                                      and loving every minute!)
End.
©2006-2009 ~FailingMemory127
:iconfailingmemory127:

Author's Comments

Full Title: The Formal Letter to a Primary Slave On How to String Fish and Embrace L O V E

Bwahahaha, I had fun writing this.
I looked at the title of Ka-chan's (flappability) newest poem from her third grade years (which I had yet to read when I started this poem) and decided to write loopily and freely and crazily and this is the result! Oh, formalities... they're so unformal who would have guessed? Bwahaha. I hope you enjoy this as much as I did. Thanks for the inspiration, Ka-chan!

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Inexplicably, I love this. There's a typo that bothers me in this line "very morning, as we much those leftover mashed potatoes (microwavable)" I'm assuming "much" is supposed to be "munch." I thought for a moment that I'd viewed a daily deviation instead of clicking on the newest deviations link. There's something about it stylistically that reads like one of my friend's writings which is why it appeals to me, I think. I love the narration to it, and the spacing, and really, it's quite awesome.

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That's not irony. That's omniprescence! -=Oohoo
I am not a pirate!
*PWFA ~ STILL a pervert after all this time.
:iconfullydistorted:
aww coool.... rlly enjoyed it ....
even tho its goin ova ma tiny braincells )+
but i luv it... :hug:

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___________________________
Gravedigger, wen u dig my grave
cud u make it shallow?
so that i can feel the rain....

.....u belonged to me ):
not swallowed in the sea....
:iconfailingmemory127:
Haha, thank you for catching my mistakes! o_o And thank you for the expansive compliments!
I was editing something much larger than this poem, and decided to take a break. I guess it was a good time, because I am totally infatuated with it... glad that you enjoyed it as well!

--
Descend - I can do death scenes like nobody's business!
For more art/me, check out the website!
The Cowation - blog
:iconfailingmemory127:
Hehe.. random statements of how love is important too in a crazy fashion. Ah the randomness... it's so much more fun than being confined to the tiny walls of stuck. Glad you liked it!

--
Descend - I can do death scenes like nobody's business!
For more art/me, check out the website!
The Cowation - blog
:iconfullydistorted:
didnt look all that random :) ..

--
___________________________
Gravedigger, wen u dig my grave
cud u make it shallow?
so that i can feel the rain....

.....u belonged to me ):
not swallowed in the sea....
:iconwiccakitten:
Your spacing and linebreaks are incredible
the concept is breathtaking and makes me smile

I'm also a handmaiden of Secondary
I hope you write more poetry in this style, it suits.

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"Look down at me and see a fool;
look up at me and see a god;
look straight at me and see yourself."
/Charles Manson

VIVA LE PICNIC!
:iconfailingmemory127:
Thanks!
Trying something funky has never felt so good.

--
Descend - I can do death scenes like nobody's business!
For more art/me, check out the website!
The Cowation - blog
:iconwiccakitten:
xD

yeah, I love using that kind of crazy style

--

"Look down at me and see a fool;
look up at me and see a god;
look straight at me and see yourself."
/Charles Manson

VIVA LE PICNIC!
:iconflappability:
Ha! You managed to do something funky and crazy are farfetchedly flimsily bold without losing the depth! And the deepness

This is great, haha. I like it. Not very flowy and rhymy, but that's fine, because there is a beauty in unrhymy!


this line is just wonderfully whacko - "No, she wants a stamp on every molecule of water
defining it as HERS and HERS alone (as Primary is doing US a favor by giving US what's HERS)
"


And I also love how you made "primary slave" the archetype of the kind of person who is a slave to the shallow poppie flingy type ofof so called "love", and "secondary" as what is real, and what lasts and what really matters.
Well atleast that's how i interpretted it.

foodwaterair
morningnightday

=]

Those squishednesses made me smile.

I am glad that you let me put my own two cents into this making of this poem...

THANk you and you are welcome!

--
-- F.
"like two mammoths tusk-locked in ernest sport at the edge of the advancing ice age, you were my mystery and i was your mystery and in time we discovered that mystery was our home."
-l.cohen

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